Pinnacle
FADE IN
THE CAMERA MOVES IN TO
CLOSE SHOT
A MAN
The man is standing
in his kitchen
late
at
night
He
stands in front of the
open pantry
tired
and
hateful
of himself
He
is not hungry.
He
does not want food.
He
looks at an unopened bottle of wine,
black wine,
and says (VERY CLOSE SHOT),
"I wish I were
an alcoholic.
I wish I drank so
uncontrollably
that every one knew,
and hated me for it."
Hated him
because they accepted him.
WIDE SHOT, STREET LIGHT
THROUGH KITCHEN WINDOW
MORNING IS COMING
CUT TO MOON
TIGHT SHOT OF MAN
WITH MOON-SILVER FACE
LOOKING OUT WINDOW
SERIOUS SLOW MORNING MOON FADE
TO BLACK
ROLL CREDITS
THE CAMERA MOVES IN TO
CLOSE SHOT
A MAN
The man is standing
in his kitchen
late
at
night
He
stands in front of the
open pantry
tired
and
hateful
of himself
He
is not hungry.
He
does not want food.
He
looks at an unopened bottle of wine,
black wine,
and says (VERY CLOSE SHOT),
"I wish I were
an alcoholic.
I wish I drank so
uncontrollably
that every one knew,
and hated me for it."
Hated him
because they accepted him.
WIDE SHOT, STREET LIGHT
THROUGH KITCHEN WINDOW
MORNING IS COMING
CUT TO MOON
TIGHT SHOT OF MAN
WITH MOON-SILVER FACE
LOOKING OUT WINDOW
SERIOUS SLOW MORNING MOON FADE
TO BLACK
ROLL CREDITS
posted by Jeremy at Friday, March 31, 2006
10 Comments:
CUT>>>PRINT>>>
Just drink the wine!
FADE IN
TO CLOSE SHOT
OF DIESEL'S EYES
STARING STRAIGHT
INTO YOUR SOUL
CUT to Samb
looking uncustomarily
sheepish
CLOSE SHOT OF
DIESEL'S CROOKED
MOUTH
"Samb, I want to
actually film this."
SAMB LOOKS UP
CUT TO TIGHT SHOT
OF SAMB'S EYES
The left eye
twitches.
"Okay. Let's do it."
and the pegg bows out first. nice pull.
Eight Months
Pegg, you made some poems
So accessable to us
But you closed the door.
~fin~
funny you should use the word accessable... sam?
dude... its like this: i learned a ton by posting my writing on here. i feel that it has helped me be a better writer. writing stuff that only a few people understand is retarded and pretentious.
that said, being overly concerned about the reader can get out of balance as well.
stephen king talks about writers having a tool box. this is where the foundation of your writing is stored. i feel like in the last 8 months i have gathered many new tools and now its time to get to work.
pegg
exactly.
that is what i said. there is a balance. my concern was that the balance was shifting. making something more reader friendly is not dumbing it down.
no matter how a poem is written it will almost always be interpreted differently by the reader. that is part of the beauty of poetry.
i have heard it said that a poem is like a game with 52 playing cards face down. the poet sits across from his reader and turns some of the cards over... some of them. but some of them are left face down. if ALL of the cards are left face down, then you are not playing a game at all... you are just playing solitare.
someone will say, "I like playing solitare." well go ahead.
pegg
I like Minesweeper.
Diddy you are the
master of conversation
killing. Stop that jounce.
At least leave us with a picture to look at. How about the one I have of you walking away?
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